MrDigitalKid

This is a pretty good prologue, the beginning was great, but the ending was well... kinda unexpected, wierd if i must say... “Never heard of Jack the Ripper?”(Im guessing you ...

I actually like this, im definitely hooked towards this story. However, in my opinion i think You gave away the part about the future thing abit too early, but hey! ...

I completely agree with the other critiques above me, the plot seems good but the writing seems like total gibberish, add some suspense to hook the readers. To be honest, ...

Thanks Reason Invalid for Critiquing.. my work, and giving an opinion, i really appreciate that xD Oh and by the way, Its short because its only the first 2 paragraphs ...

Firstly, Lol, I no that the title CHILD'S PLAY has already been used for a film, so please dont mention that :D , Me and My Co-Creating-book friend and trying ...