Mossyra

Chapter Three Zack ran through the forest, terrified. Behind him, he clearly heard the shouts of his pursuers, and he dared not stop for a moment; instead he carried on, ...

It was excellently written, but with a few punctuation and spelling errors. Also, a little nitpicking--there are 52 weeks in a year, not 48. For the spelling, it was just ...

Thanks! Wow, lots of questions. My favorite color is blue, my favorite book changes just about every time I read a book, favorite movie is a similar problem, and most ...

An interesting beginning, and well-written. The only thing I really noticed was that you usually leave out commas when one person directly addresses another, such as “Doing what sweetie?” and ...

Chapter Two The man stepped forward gracefully, his sword gleaming in the moonlight. The young girl stumbled backward, her mind racing for a way to escape, but she came up ...

It definitely needs some revision, mostly just stuff a good proofread will fix, but I like it. Some awkward phrasing, fragmented sentences, and a little bit of repitition, to be ...

It sounds good, but I'm not quite sure of one or two places. One example is: The real only one thing they desire... This should probably be written as "The ...

This is great! Excellent story structure, well thought out, and a good flow to the story. I like how you change some phrases to fit better, like "shrimping out" instead ...

Hi! I'm new here. I've been writing for four years, but I'm still trying to figure out my style and make my stories work, so I tinker and change things ...

This is a story I'm working on, and I'm still tinkering with it; any suggestions or criticisms are welcome. Thank you! Prologue They were a story, told to restless children ...