Monstrar

Well, there's no plot, no depth to the characters, hardly a setting, no background information, and it's rather what do you want us to critique? It's kind of impossible to ...

Hello! Your story is pretty good, but the first mistake I noticed was here: you whether your alive or not "your" should be "you're" and there is absolutely nothing special ...

I was staying over at Mia’s house again, and as usual, Declan hung around with us for the whole evening, pestering me about insignificant little things until I remarked upon ...

A/N :This is just a random segment from a story that I started a while back, but never really got back into. Tell me what you think, please. :smt001 Oh ...

Hmm, I like it, but at the same time it just kind of whizzes by. It's kind of hard to really get into the story.

Yes, where exactly is this story headed? Like the user above me stated, who is your character? What are their personality traits, flaws...? No offense, but this seems like something ...

I would like to say that Georgia is very quiet when it comes to class, but I’m afraid that she is extremely loud And also in this sentence, maybe you ...

That was extremely cute. I liked it, and look forward to reading more from you. I don't have any critque, no more than what everyone else has already said, so ...

why exactly was it that no matter the season, no matter how many layers I had on, whether I had gloves on, or a hat, it didn't matter You can ...

She sat still and just looked around, not I don't think you need "just" in there Ok, I think it's a good premise and it's pretty interesting, but it goes ...

words of comfort when I am feeling down; words of humour to make me laugh on the worst of days; words of wisdom when I am confused; words of knowledge ...

This is actually really great. I enjoyed reading it and I love your characters. Thy're very interesting so far. I can't wait to read more. Keep up the good [edited] ...

Her name.....Ella. What's with the long pause? Just say: "Her name: Ella" And WOW...it's so rushed. I know it's just the outline, but if you're serious about writing a story ...

Yea, this is sort of LONG... Anyway, the first paragraph is sort of over descriptive IMO. We get the point that he doesn't talk much, but I don't think you ...

home I found my parents sound asleep and so, I didn’t have to put up with any crap about staying out so late. You can make that a much stronger ...