MonsieurRosseau

EDIT: I made it longer. (Mentally subtract two from my review count.)

Thanks for the critique, Mars. I should probably write the rest of the beginning, because this seems to be the last two scenes. Maybe it'll feel less rushed then. (Though ...

Ah, vivid description, tense mood, and fears that we all can identify with. Such vignettes are always fun. Well, as far as actual problems with this work, I'd say the ...

Just a quick warning: I first composed the story late at night, and finished it out of love for the main character. It's not an amazing plot, but... I hope ...

(Not a review.) This story is made of awesome. I was too enraptured to try finding fault with it. If I could, I would vote this to win the unlikely ...

See, I thought about that, but the ending lacked the certain random style that the rest had, and seeing daylight is a bit serious. Thanks for the advice, though!

I... Don't know what to say about this poem. The inconsistent rhythm is either purposefully disquieting or obviously imperfect, and the rhyme scheme seems utterly arbitrary. It's hard to even ...

Hi! Nice metaphorical poem! I enjoyed it. Um, I might just be reading it wrong, but the rhythm of the second two lines seems to be inconsistent. I tried tapping ...

Hi there! Hope you don’t mind another review! These were some problems that stuck out to me: 1. Some of your rhymes don't quite work. Just because the last letters ...

Hello there! Nice poem you've got here. A few things I didn't understand, though: 1. The third line -- I think you're saying she brings the night air with her, ...

Thanks for the review. Her "night of sin" was the fey party. Where does it lose rhythm?

Come closer, darling, come and stay Come and join our masquerade Come and keep your fear away Come henceforth from where you lay Join us as we dance and sing ...

Siriusly?

I must say, I adored the ending of the plot. It's a simple tale, true, but it's deep and memorable at the same time (which is what makes a good ...

Need I say more?