Monki

Ha ha! No, seriously though. Pursue your dream. I think you're meant to use the pen as your weapon-definitely not a sword though, because I don't think you+a sword would ...

P. > Yay! Monki gets :smt054 back! (P.S. You can't truthfully tell me that you like my work. It sucks right now. I think it's just because I am just ...

P. > Thanks for the tip. *Writes down on notepad full of tips given by peeps of YWS (really, I did write it down-just 'cause it sounds cool and professional)* ...

Hey, thanks again P.! Monki has lots of

No, that's exactly what I need! It's not harsh! It's constructive ! Keep it up! People think it hurts, but if they know how to use it, it helps. :) ...

Personally, I'd stick with what you do. Manga (remember, this is my opinion) is (pardon my language, but this is what I think) gay. No offense to those who like ...

Good suggestions. In fact, I was thinking of starting sort of over and making the beginning where she is fighting and arguing her point with the conclave, but the reason ...

Thank you both for your critiques. Kylan > Good thing I take 'constructive' criticism well. That's a good thing though. I need people to be a bit tough on me ...

Thanks P. I shall be modifying this (yet again) shortly. :) Lol. Thanks for the encouragement (?) Lancrist.

Very, very, very good writing! I love the whole plot! But, as mentioned above, the characters are yet to be described... Unless of course you are waiting until a bit ...

Wow. Kleptomaniac is right! I really like this piece, as I am weird myself. ;) Good work! PM me too! Please critique any of my work that you wish. Thanks! ...

Wow! Thanks Porcelain! I don't think anyone's ever said that they 'love' my work before! I guess that's because I've just began becoming serious about writing... Okay, I'll edit that ...

Well, thanks. :) I suppose it is weird. I guess that's sort of what I'm aiming for. Because seriously, normal is not my forte' at all, so really, it's good ...

Wow! Thanks love! Lol. (A bit of her mother's accent.) ;) It's a girl's name by the way. It's pronounced : Mi-kel. Basically it sounds just as it's spelled. :) ...

Alrighty Saint Razorblade! Lol. I spaced out the other excerpt you were going to critique, so I'll do this one real fast too. :)