Moalex

I made a mistake on the first reply. I meant to say "showing the difference between a person's true characteristic and society's expectations of actions to decide the norm and ...

Never mind it was too obvious...

If possible could you help me nit pick one or two of the major errors in terms of grammatical errors. Or just tell me which paragraph is the most damaged. ...

I will rewrite the part of the scheduling so that it makes more sense instead of random chop up scenarios.

So to answer you're questions from the second chapter and to this chapter, indeed the dream was meant to be extremely bizarre. In my opinion and the people that I've ...

Is that a bad thing to do? Or should I stick with rushing the plot.

Thanks for the nit picks, I don't know how many times i've read and revised this one chapter over and over again. You already read the first draft of it, ...

Thanks for the review, I still plan on reading this over another three to four times in hopes there are things I can change. Until then, chapter 2 is still ...

You got it dead on in my opinion, I watch a lot of films and movies and I've always fantasized my own stories in my head. I've always wanted to ...

That's okay, I still make tons of mistakes myself. I constantly need people to look over my work in order to find errors that I didn't think was an error.

Thanks for the review. This helps a lot since it lets me know there's still a lot of learning for me.

I like it when people are straight up with what they think and what they need to say. It gives me motivation to try better and not see the same ...

Thanks for everything, you were a really big help because I'm terrible with literature. The explanations on all the errors really helps me learn.

I'm completely fine with that. I prefer having blunt/harsh response to motivate me to do better. The hardest path is the best experience in my opinion. Thanks for the advice!

Thanks for the advice! I'll be sure to take your advice for proofreading and character/scenery introductions.