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Hey Writer97, Great poem! I loved the rhyming in this and you captured its theme really well. Improvements? Divide you poem into two stanzas (or verses), this will make it ...

Hi senseiawesome, This was such a great poem! A little nit-pick, read over it a maybe expand some lines by a word or two, just to get the timing right. ...

Hey Emmzziee, I loved this poem! I think it's the perfect length, so don't worry too much about that. It flowed well, had a great rhyming scheme, was simple to ...

Hey PaulClover, You said you suck at poetry, but you've actually got quite some potential! Advice? Add a little more detail into it and maybe extend the stanzas just to ...

Hey Pigeon3, This poem is better than you think! If this is what you write when you're rushing, then what you write when you're not rushing must be amazing! This ...

Hey thestorygirl, This is pretty great, you know? haha. It has such great and rich imagery and emotion, definitely worth reading. It flowed gracefully but with strong feeling. And you ...

Hi Matthews, This was a really good poem! It felt mystical and magical and the imagery was great. Problems? In some areas it rhymed, some it didn't. So maybe make ...

Hey Skorpionne, WOW! Great job! It rhyming so amazingly well, and not just that, but the timing was perfect! Timing, I think, is a really important element to a poem, ...

Hi NikkiLow, This was really great! I loved it completely! The rhyming scheme worked perfectly in this poem, but maybe re-read it because the timing was out in some places. ...

Hey Yuriiko, Haha, well I loved this poem! It had such great humor in it which is what I found really appealing. The timing was just a little out of ...

Hi wewinwelose, This was a really good poem! I think the wording was really great. Um, things you need to work on? The rhyming scheme. It's good, but it makes ...

Hey holyiao, I really enjoyed reading this poem! Someone said the rhyming effect was annoying - NO WAY! It was really well done and it fit the poem perfectly. This ...

Hey Emmzziee, Well, well done on this poem! It has great potential and with a little bit more work, it'll become even better! So, I liked the rhyming effect you ...

Hi poetrymylovely, Well, it was a very creepy visual poem, I must say. The poem had good rhythm and it actually flowed well. But I do agree with the others, ...

Hi KnightlyAngel09, This was such a great poem! It truly was. It was simple to read, yet you kept persistant with the message you were trying to get across, and ...