Misty

Pretty-words-strung-together. I don't love it like I used to love your stuff. The smarter you get, the harder it is for me to connect to your work. It's poetic, but ...

One thing I know for a fact is that agents aren't going to wait for the action chapter, no way. They want to be interested instantly or you're screwed. Readers ...

Gadi--that wasn't supposed to be the end of the chapter, the thingy cut it off. The end is much better, I promise, and thank you. I'll try to fix the ...

This is quite the little short story. I'll see if I can disect it. Frederich struggled to find a hand hold on the slippery slope of which he clung to ...

Allllllll right. I am going to give you the benefit of the doubt here because you are a new writer. There's nothing wrong with being new. If you bothered to ...

Ohmygoodness. *Dies laughing.* This is the epitome of good satire. My very favorite part, "IT'S NOT TOMAHTO!" This is written in such good review style, perfect emulation of a journalist, ...

Bright Eyes for happy scenes Bright Eyes for sad scenes Bright Eyes for tragic moments Bright Eyes for insane fallacies Bright Eyes for character development Bright Eyes for beginning moments/relation

Brad, You're absolutely hilarious. (And of course, partway right). The line is thin. I'd watch it if I were you. Sometimes you come across as belitting and cruel. Often, in ...

I am your Most Reluctant Audience. I am the reader you are going to have to reach--and there's a whole troupe of us out there. Even though there are people ...

YOU SEE! You said it was sucky and everybody liked it! Go you! *Beams*

Grammatical errors abound. Broken sentences, run on sentences, and so on. I can't be very helpful, because you didn't hold my attention long enough for me to finish it. It ...

Hi, Berry! You're doing a great job here. It's really impressive that out of thirty four posts, 21 are reviews. I'm really proud of you and welcome to the site! ...

I read it! All I can say is...infodump! Okay, and The Godfather reincarnated. The biggest issue with this story is that we've seen it fact we've seen it many times, ...

You're a doll. Absolutely wonderful. I'll tell you what, I could never write like this when I was thirteen. (And thirteen is not so young...) This had real passion, and ...

You use extremely strong imagery, some repeated. The part about words sticking to your insides was pure genius. The entire song really, rivaled Kelly Clarkson for a breakup bash. It ...