Misty

It's really good, the story line and general plot drew me in right away, but it needs more description, and less chatting. That's all I caught!

i agree. it starts to get stronger as you keep reading. thats what I wanted it to do. :D

But whoever it is, or whatever you're doing I hope that something somewhere Is reminding you of me This is my favorite part. I really like this poem altogether. I ...

we always knew you would be the one to save us walking down concrete slabs reciting slam poetry in inverse free-style harmony and you’ve got your eyes tilted just so ...

but his record was spotless; he would not allow a single mistake to poison his record. I would say, "he would not allow a single mistake to poison it," that's ...

I don’t really know how to feel you, but maybe by feel I mean show you how I feel, I’ve already touched you, and kissed you, like exotic honey from ...

I wouldn't do it. My uncle has connections with a publisher that's FOR SURE, so why would I risk anything less than actual publishing. Plus, I wouldn't sell my writing ...

Hmmm..well the plot was interesting, I suppose, but I guess it just wasn't my type of story. The beginning and the end were sort of weak, and the writing level ...

red is best. but they all taste the same :D :D :D

I would have liked this a lot better if I was more open to the gay/lesbien thing. As it was, it sort of grossed me out. :( But I'll crit ...

thanks everyone! Your crit helped a lot. :D I appreciate it. :D

How many petitions with underlying scars and broken hearts must you make before you realize: there isn't a point? And how many times will you hole picket signs on the ...

yeah, writer-X, thanks a lot. HAhahahahahahahahaha....that seriously cracked me up. Any of my friends will vouch for me, I'm not fat! And ... hahahahahahaha!!! don't worry you guys, he's probably ...

I thought this was really profound, it's a good poem. I haven't got any crit left in me today, thogh

I flinch. All the time. And I dart my eyes around a lot when I'm talking.