Misty

You were the boy I always wanted to be. *sounds like a good start to me. draws my attention* I half-expected you to live again *know how that is...* rise ...

yeah yeah, brad. As usual..you're going to give up poetry...lol. how many times have you said that? I'll crit this the best I can, I guess. I always like critting ...

I wasn't sure about this one. To me, the voice seemed...sort of fake. I liked the stuff about the angels, though. :D Overall to me it was just...*sighs* oh dear, ...

It’s like some sort of weird spirit takes over my body when I’m around you-I’m sure I couldn’t have said that. My heart has somehow lodged itself in my throat, ...

lol, you are crazy!!!! But this is...kinda weird but hey, every one does it once in a while. lol...yeah you really have lost it though...

for some reasong this seemed more like a list to me, like, "I did this, then I did that." but I'm not really sure how you can fix that. :(. ...

well, I liked it. I thought it sounded innocently sweet. I actually knew what nostalgia meant, too! In the 4rth line of the 1rst stanza you say, "for the now," ...

So, I was just another girl. You had a list. A plan, a scheme. Call it what you will. Did I have a number? Girl number 34? Do I get ...

oh. nm.

thank you. I'll add "on a pedastal" just for you!

It's so beautiful! I love the all-out obsession that this portrays, and the imagery was wonderful. It obviously kept me reading, and I loved it. "everything about me depends on ...

you don't really need help with this...you just like opinions, right? That's what I do with most of my stories, just post them to get opinions, because I don't really ...

just a side note: I wasn't drunk when I was dancing with him, it was just meant to say his presence was intoxicating. if you know what I mean. Just ...

yeah. I plugged a lot of people. I was really desperate for crit on this one cuz I want to make it good so it'll really mean something. :D thank ...

A storm was brewing over him.... Hmm, how about, "A storm brewed overhead," or something like that? The wind was picking up and things were being blown off the ground, ...