Misty

"own" or "owe," in that last bit? This is highly unconventional, but it kept me interested enough to keep reading, which is unusual. It's more of a short story, I ...

*coughs* *echos what Snoink said* I've seen this. More than once. In fact, this is a typical teen angst poem. "She deserves a life worth living" Really. Really?

Ehhhmmm...Well I will echo what you said about the first paragraph of my story: make it more interesting so it drags your reader in more, because it's kind of boring. ...

Heya, it was o.k. :) You're quite prolific lately. Good for you. I liked this sunflowers have thorns? The descriptions are lovely, I especially like the part about the sunflower ...

(people who read the first section--the intro--will note that I changed the name of the main character from Gabby to Manizha) CHAPTER ONE: Over the Rainbow Manizha was halfway aware ...

I agree with Sigfried about the transition. The first half of the story interested me, the second half didn't. At all. Try again?

haha, chatting it up in the poetry forums. I'm good. just taking a break from book edits.

Ooooohhhh back talk is not good. We do not talk back to Snoinkus, uhh uh. That's a good way to stop getting reviews FAST. And defensiveness is ugly. Actually this ...

Hi hon. Capitalize your "i's" or it seems sloppy. And get rid of all the teen angst, it isn't working. I am encouraged to see that you haven't been fussed ...

I was expecting something great from this. Nice job, you delivered. He inserts the charger: in, out, in, out. It feels very good after such a long day. I am ...

just very, very wordy. what is the point of elaborating for that long about a weed? the title and those sentences would be fine. (grand sentences, though!) and hello! :) ...

GENERAL NOTES First off, I'm discouraged by the fact that kitty said you haven't edited this much from the last time. That's no good. Hopefully you will change or utilize ...

As if to sing, “I’ll be here forever,” “when the night grows feral and bitter, I’ll be here.” I absolutely adore this, and the title. The rest, alas, is too ...

This is actually quite good for your age. ^_^ I thought the imagery was nice.

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