Misty

I lost it when I lost my mind, for without hope no mind can be sane. First sentence of this-excellent. Second-wretched. Get rid of it. It deflects from the brilliant-osity ...

I second the black rose.

I'm using the gray..lol it just looks best to me

The italicized dead gave me a jolt. Very ominous. And a very strong way of starting off the poem. The second line of the second stanza = brilliant. Third stanza ...

Nah. Just oddball. It's slang, not description, that's why. Puppy god should be puppy dog. Thanks!

It was good...Not great. But good. The ending was weak though, and some of the ideas seemed badly portrayed and even weak. Cliche, in other words. Certain ones that bothered ...

:P I saw Ice Age 2 and it was GREAt. I love jogging, yeah that's why I'm excited for this too. YAY

Second is better.

awwwwwwwwwww I"m sorry. I totaly know how you feel.

I thought the whole thing was great. First stanza-fab. Second stanza-marvy Third Stanza-intense, powerful and gut-wrenching. I love your poetry, can you tell?

Too much inconsistant rhyming, too many typos, too generic. Make it your own.

Okaydokay, the rhyming was rather forced and cliche, and quite overpowering. Maybe you should try to fit the ideas into freeverse, I think it would be much more effective. Becase ...

I second Re :P and also Snoink. Must always write what comes from the heart, always always. It's not worth writing otherwise. But I also get that you're new at ...

It's pretty, and halfway deep. I liked it.

*shrug* I dunno. Too late I'm already three quarters through it. Besides, there's nothing original about that...:P