Misty

Teeheehee, quite adorable. Opaque is a wonderful word I discovered in a little kid star wars novel, it's kind of like foggy-eyed...hard to explain. And uh...I don't know what hyperglycemic ...

I shanghied EVERYONE into a critique. I am desperate *cough* Determined. :P But yes, *cracks knuckles, puts on "bitch hat"* Let's get down to it!

Her skin pale and her blue eyes sharp with distrust and deep set anger. Should be "her skin *was* pale" Yet, the man took it stoically his brown eyes mirroring ...

*points* emo!

This is really amazing. I enjoyed it. It had a real touch of nostalgia about it. It was the last three sentences that made it, though.

I met a glass man in a glass house. I was sixteen. I don’t remember why I was there; I just know I was drifting off of the roof and ...

Ah, I noticed something new when I was ruminating on your story in my bedroom (yes...I really was). Her name is Alissa Jewel, but her nickname is AJ. Alissa Jewel ...

Revise the last stanza "Clever" has nothing to do with anything.

Ahoy, Erin! I find your writing very quaint, and I enjoy it, but just as any beginner will find, there are imperfections. New writers tend to sway a bit toward ...

Hmmm, it's hard to give advice, since I've never read any of your writing. Be brave, take the plunge and post it! Or, if you want, you can PM it ...

I enjoyed reading this, it was really well-done, the only part that I would maybe change is: I know you live in the middle of nowhere because I turned my ...

Ah, yes, Sam is totally right. It look so, so much better when you have correct punctuation, good grammar, all that. It looks so much better to just hit 'return' ...

Hmm...I'm not sure how to respond to this because I don't undersand all. :) I suppose poetry is open to interpretation but! if you'd like to PM me and let ...

Graham the Fucking Cracker It starts off like this: you’re eleven years old, you’re walking home from school, kind of sulking because you got detention ‘stead of recess. It’s a ...

There are two POV's, the girl and the guy's, but at the moment, they are running together so I just posted the girl's. Tawny Rae This morning I woke up ...