Misty

by the way, ignore negative reviews with broad, overreaching statements and no personal detail. you're a really good writer, and when you get older (or perhaps even now) you'll learn ...

What a fantastically post-modern story. This might be one of the best pieces I've ever read on this website. It's so amazing because I understand what he means when he ...

cloves and ginger? that is an indescribably delicious smell! without doing anything more than say one simple, yet exotic scent, you've given us an original peek into the girl's past. ...

I feel the need to revise my previous post. I had no idea that this was the girl's very first story, and was perhaps in an over-critiquing mode, so I ...

So, turning east, the bird, though lacking truth, into the window flew This is awkwardly phrased. Redo? Other than that, I enjoyed it. It was unique, which was the goal ...

Hey! Good concept for a poem! I especially like the last line, and wish the rest of the poem were more like it. You need to work on your punctuation ...

Startlingly fresh and original. Also, hilarious. I'm surprised that you were able to hold my attention through the whole piece (it's a high compliment). You're obviously a very gifted (and ...

Oh dear. It started off so promisingly, and then it ended up being a rant about not smoking and so on...and what is, according to Stephen King, rule #1 about ...

the last four lines are excellent and I got what you were talking about, which is a good thing

Sounds like one of those cheesey bulletins you have to repost on Myspace otherwise you don't care about life or small children and amy's ghost will knife you from under ...

Hey. Startling idea. Not saying it hasn't been done before, but I'll critique. LINE EDITS Lenore commenced strolling down her street. Certainly not a good way to start it off. ...

I don't read Dilbert, but the few times I have, it's been him shirking his office work. Hah. :)

awwww....that's sweet. Although a book with no plot is questionable. but still sweet!

*agrees with Snoink, as I find myself so often doing*

last two lines = good. other than that...er...yeah, bad.