Misty

Well, if you read through this you'll find that at one point you say 'his father' which is third person, while the rest of it is first person. And you ...

JIMMY November 29th, 1989 Day One: Starts off wif us running, cause it’s called running away and that’s all that makes sense to us to be doing. Samantha’s fingers laced ...

Thanks Sam :) teeheeeheeh *sneaky grin*

Haha...welll I've been here around two years and I have yet to hit the 1,000 posts marker...

Nnyeg. Not my favorite. "The lights on the vanity shone with a powerful but kind glow, softly reflecting off her face’s smooth features." Light cannot be 'kind' in the same ...

"Jolly pedestrians weren’t seen without a smile." Yes, I'm sure they weren't, but what about the less-than-jolly ones? Don't write in letters in the middle of a sentence: aka "The ...

(A quick note: the grammar and syntax is how I meant it to be, to capture the specific character voice. Comments here should be about the story or the reading). ...

It doesn't make any more sense, and it's useless to defend yourself saying that you *do* read 3 books a week. It isn't always easy to find books you connect ...

You read too many romantic fiction books.

Ok you're doing a lot wrong here. Slipping between past and present tense, first person point of view, capitalizing stuff in the middle of was ridiculous. Get a grammar book ...

You can't base a story on dialogue. You see, writing is like giving touch and taste and feeling to one who can only see black and white words on a ...

Maybe some people do...but not normal people :P Joking, joking. I'm not that girl either, sevendeadlysins, but perhaps someday. It's best to write about what you know, in any case.

Nyegg....I wasn't exactly creeped out, I was intrigued. I probably should have been creeped out, maybe I'm psychotic. It's very real, though~little kids are always wearing those skin-revealing clothes

I was thrilled by the beginning of this, very funny (the head in oven bit). And I so know about that eleven pounds that haunts you...I'm down to four! Hoorah! ...

I was really pleased when you made her average and frizzed hair like the rest of the *normal* population. If I have to read about one more ubergorgeous female I ...