MissingAngel

This is beautiful. It flows very nicely and is overall really good. Great imagery but try using other words to describe the rain. Why do the same drops that persuade ...

I thought this was a beautiful, joyful story. The introduction was good and grabbed my attention. Just a few little things I noticed though. "Sir, I've got some very important ...

I think this is pretty good so far. There were a few parts that confused me or just sounded a bit awkward. First, there was the whole music box thing. ...

I think this has a really good plot and has great potential. I think it could have flowed a little bit better in the beginning, like if you had added ...

I haven't read the first draft of this but I really enjoyed this one. I liked the conversation between her and Tristan ( I'm so sorry if I spelled that ...