MiriamHannah

Ok here it is!!! This is the beginning to the plot really. It's where the whole story is leading. So see what you think and please review. Thank you ofir ...

"Jamie," Her face looked concerned, delicate crinkles appearing above her forehead. "It's Daniel." Unless she gave him his identity it would remain Daniel forever. "Are you sure that's what you ...

Thank you, it's really nice of you to say. I'll see if I can brighten it a little. The shot is from this dock a spent a week in the ...

Daniel Ross "I finally found you." The voice continued. "Who is this speaking?" Daniels voice raised. "Miranda silly! You were always such a tease." The name sounded familiar, like a ...

Nice, I can't get over your last line. It is good, very good. You said it was short, its really the size of my normal chapters. OK, review, right. I'm ...

Moh I ran, back paws spring happily against the concrete. I glanced back warily, my eyes filled with fear. It was her. My human. She loved picking me up, cuddling ...

Name: Moh (Mohtsie is her long name) Gender: Female Breed: Tortoise shell cat Home: Has a family and home Age: 2 or 14 years Appearance: Mainly dark, black, browns and ...

I really like this, the idea of a tree as life has been kind of worn out, another simile might be better, but apart from that it is good. The ...

I like the points in the fur, that has turned out welll, looks right for the name. I agree with awake, his front paw is way too curvey, it needs ...

Sorry, I've been getting MAJOR writer's block, each paragraph has been a huge struggle but this is basically the build up to a major chapter 9. Look forward to it ...

I'm not experienced at all actually, however kind it is for you to say. I did some minor fixing to the colours but really the landscape speaks for itself. Thank ...

See what you think, ooh and please review!

Daniel Ross He watched, day after day, as criminal after criminal was taken away. It was his work, and the rebels he worked with, they were criminals, they broke the ...

"You he's girlfriend, right?" his instead of he's. "Yes!" I said, I wouldn't put an exclamation point there, the reader already knows it's a big thing and it makes it ...

Hi, I was wondering if you wanted to review a longer piece of work, I think I'm just there on some chapters but my biggest problem is that people always ...