MiriamHannah

A cat skittered past her nervously and a bird flew so near that its feathers brushed against her neck. She stood, trembling, blanketed and blinded by the darkness and mist. ...

Just properly modified it. Hope there are less mistakes and it makes more sense. Its really helped to have people helping me. Thankyou all so much. Miriam

Thank you, I am really finding it useful to hear what people think, whether positive or negative. I have a very fixed writing style which i am attempting to make ...

Name: Matt Age:15 Power: The ability to remain unnoticed. This only works when people aren't trying to see him. He is also protected from other peoples powers. Appearance: Average in ...

Thankyou for your opinion. I do overuse commas and have started adapting that plus give it a temporary title to show a bit more of the story line. I am ...

I loved it. The intensity glues you beautifully to the screen. I know i felt like i was going through the exact same thing as her. The whole description of ...

I never read your first chapter but i like this one. The characters are easily visible and very realistic. I also really like your setting of the park where Tom's ...

I never read your first chapter but i like this one. The characters are easily visible and very realistic. I also really like your setting of the park where Tom's ...

I really liked the gothic taste that works so well in fantasy, plus the description is done to the perfect lengt to neither suffocate, nor misinform the reader. I loved ...

than waiting for some monster to wake up after 400 years. You, earlier on said that it only happened once a century, I'm confused if those two paragraphs work together.

She stood stiff, gaze never leaving the hungry sea below. So much had changed in the past few months; but for good or bad? She didn't know who she was, ...