Milaita

Wow, that gave me mental images and the shivers. Good job, because that , my friend, is hard to do. The last line, gave me the creeps, so again good ...

It's so pretty. Though the awkward rhyme scheme is a bit strange. :/ But I do like it a lot.

Thanks for your feedback. :/ I don't know if dying or dieing is right. I mix 'em up. It's dying.:/ Oh well. But anyway, thanks again. :) I'm always open ...

"Does time mend a broken heart? Does it just sit there, and gather dust? Tell me what you think. I want to know. Do the lies you tell me end ...

I have nothing to say, for it has already been said before. O.O...Keep writing, I beg of you! Whatever you've done here, keep it in mind, and definitely use this ...

... This, my dear friend, it is fascinatingly interesting. I really do like it. There are a few commas missing here and there, a few grammatical errors, and if I'm ...

Wow, this looks fun. This looks to be the start of a very interesting story. I do encourage you to keep writing.

Ohmygosh, this was good. O.O Excuse my surprise. I may find many good works here, but this? This is like... I don't know what! It has so much suspense! I'm ...

I like it. I do, really! Hehe, I just want to say, that you absolutely must keep writing this! I'm pretty sure anyone who liked this will appreciate your doing ...

Wow, this is pretty good. If you are going to keep writing, do it! If not, I suggest you do. :P This really is good, it pretty much drew me ...

Such suspense. Quite lovely. Keep writing, I can't wait to read more. :)

I really like this. Might I say that your poem isn't as depressing as some of my poems? That's a good thing. :) But, anyway, this is really good.

Ah, I see that I have used my "solid wall of words" technique again. :/ Thank you for helping me. :) I shall surely use these teachings in future posts. ...

Thank you for your response. I will surely use what you have taught me in my future posts. :)

Any corrections made here, were recommended by those who commented. The pale, yellow rays of the moon illuminated my skin as I sat upon the brick wall near the lake ...