Milaita

Something dangerous is coming, something mysterious. Older than DaVinci, older than Shakespeare. Under the water, cold and dark, a faint rumbling noise, as a plane flies by. Sleeping, desiring, sleepi

Pretty funny, and a good choice of words. Nice rhythm, and lots of rhyming. Good job, keep working!

It is nice and lovely, but I too, wish to know the moral and motive. Otherwise, this could become something great. It has a lot of potential.

It all makes sense to me, but for you, I guess it does not. So, I shall explain! My favorite thing to do. :) Ok, for the running from the ...

Woo, pretty good. :) Keep going, I am curious to see where this will go. :)

Mind reviewing my piece? Rip it to shreds, if you please.

So far, I believe this is quite nice. Keep writing, this could go far. :) It is well written, might I add.

Nice, just nice! I like this, keep going!!

Because she was chosen, I guess. She is trying to run away from the truth at first, and decides to face her fears after she realizes it isn't worth it. ...

Comment and review away! Hack it up! Do I run from the truth, or stop and face my fears? Truth or fear, it's a lot like life or death. As ...

This has caused me to be slower than usual in reviewing as I got so hooked. :P Woah, I just re-read it again, and I'm still just like=...woah. That was ...

I thought this was nice, and the rhyming was good, in contrast to my non-rhyming lines I come up with. I do hope you will keep writing pieces like this. ...

It may have been short, I agree, but, the shortest novels and stories are often some of the best. Pieces like these should be appreciated and loved. They are very ...

Wow, this is good. I like the whole "I'll put you in a trance to get what I need." thing. That's so fun! I wish I could do that to ...

Oh boy, this is getting better. I do hope you will keep writing this. This has suspense like I've never seen before. I cannot wait to see what you decide ...