Mike88

yes, so if anybody wants to crit this then they are welcome too! :)

Ok, so here is the new chapter one! It's still slightly grammatically incorrect and with bad spelling, but it's the story that counts! So yes, please read it and feel ...

Hehe, thanks for that! wow I didn't realize how many mistakes I made! I really need to get Microsoft word! I'll go about fixing that right away, although I think ...

yes. so any crit you guys wnat to leave, it would be lovely

*ackkowledges misty*

well thanks for the crit. Ohewwo it's interesting you should mention the red hot chili pepper thing. One day when i was bored i decided to write a story, but ...