MidnightVampire

Ok, this is a fantasy storybook. *smile* Anyway here are the rules or restrictions, whatever. 1. Your character can be an elf, fairy, human, or a witch. You can have ...

I'm finally editing it! I'll fix the cake thing late ( I rewrote that part, but I don't have it with me). I might mix a few suggestions (I'm trying ...

Ok, I agree on all of the above ( I'm like that, sadly).Hillarious!

Wow, you sound like one of those A students in school ( just by what you said of ' buy i"m going to do more anyway). I really liked this, ...

Ok, I really liked this, a lot. I like the 'Lost. Lost everything'. At first when I read this I was confuzed what you lost, but then when it said ...

I can't do the little quote thingys so here it is. When it says "Before he could reach Thomas however (comma) two hooded ...." and the paragraph after that, I ...

I just realized my quote didn't work. The sentence was " Maybe I should get some clothes on before breakfast" Sorry If I confuzed anyone.

Man, that is good. I can't write romance like that. Not even if I tried really hard, and I mean really, really hard. Uh, the previous person mentioned a lot ...

Yeah, about being harsh.Sometimes people have to be like that, it gets the word through. About the whole 'me myself and I' quip that you think is lame, it's there ...

I'm an idiot. Where i said, the thing about 'must notice something about being a vampire' I ddin't see your point. Sooorrry!! *looks down at feet glumly*

Ok, here's one no one mentioned, it said that a man and a child crossed the street with out even aknologing her. Would that mean that she almost ran over ...

Well, I forgot who ayumi was. ( that's my issue not yours) I liked this, I wasn't able to read the entire thing (because I didn't know who Auyumi) but ...

seraphTree went on saying how the beginning didn't catch her interest, saying it was good, but could have been a little more catching. This beginning, however, is quite intersting to ...

Ok, I would so totally read this ( sorry for the teenager talk). I love your descriptions. It seems something that my friend would read. I like the whole wolf ...

Why did you use.... the name. ( you should know what i"m talking about.) Um, hmm. I liked it. I'm not going to give you a big critique, that will ...