MidnightVampire

Anyone? It's lonely.

This is good. It might help if you have some punctuation (Mrs. S would like that), I like the ending also. Maybe make the WAS into italicized? I don't know.

*Oh, didn't know that. But I still don't know what to post.*

I actually really liked this (yay self esteem booster!) It is dramatic, very dramatic, which is something I like. It also has some emotion (which most of my poems seem ...

Ok, things seem to happen quickly. He meets Beckah, and falls in love with her in a couple of hours. This kinda bugs me, because things don't happen in real ...

Ok, I finally have time to reply. 1. I did think that this speach went a little bit long, but it helped show how she was raised and what she ...

First of all.. Welcome to YWS! This stanza seems off (and since I still can't get the quote to work, it's handwritten): to let my mind fast-forward so i click ...

It's edited, I've tried to add more emotion, but it didn't go to well, so I'm still trying to fix that, sorry. I also changed the beginning and added a ...

I actually torture my characters... a lot. My friend has a book that is basically filled with her torturing her characters, because its necissary in her case. I torture my ...

Sooo cute! That's a really good glow that you made, I can't do that. again, Sooo cute.

I like number 3 I would read it (and so would claire-a friend of mind)

Uggghhh. I hate writers block. I don't think there's anything else in the universe that will bug me more than writers block. If I could make writers block into a ...

Ok, so my sister is standing (or sitting actually) and she says it's great. (actually she says its amazing) You've got a nack for this..... wow. I don't really know ...

Um... I haven't been able to critique this. It might help if you format it a little bit differently. Sorry.

I liked it. Something I actually got, makes me proud. This is a very interesting subject (I call them Psi- vampires like order.) Ok, and (this is something to clarify ...