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Hi! I don't think the repetition in the beginning was necessary, as it didn't really add anything to the poem. If I were you, I'd only use that line once. ...

Hai LoveStrykes! I suppose first thing's first: Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. :) So, what do you write? Poetry? Prose? Well, whatever it is, be sure ...

Hi! With the pacing of the story, I felt as though the beginning and the end of the story was on fast forward. I think what caused that is probably ...

Hi tgirly! The poem's formatting seems a bit spastic and random. Like here: Will never See him. I think that it would've been better if you just place it all ...

Hi cammie! First of all, I'll say that I liked the topic of the poem and the speculation that's presented in it. The analogy in the story between the human ...

Hi! I'd say you got your point across. Or well, I think I did. So, I'll tell you what I got from it and you can decided wheter that's what ...

Hello! I found that I rather liked this poem. It's simple and easy to read. It also sounded rather cheeky. I also laughed when reading it. :) In your poem, ...

Hello! So, rather cute story, even though Lucy was quite mean and not-so-cute in the story. But, I think that the story is cute because you captured the innocence of ...

Hello! So, with the poem, I think the whole metaphor is really good and different, because quite often, poems about these topics are written out plainly without metaphors or anything. ...

Hi! So, I quite like this poem. I liked the juxtaposition between the waves and the emotions behind it. I also liked the fact that you chose the ocean, because ...

Hi! So, I liked the first stanza, I liked the way how you personified the emotion Melancholy. It makes seemed more real and 3D. With the second stanza, I think ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! Hope you like it here! :D I've written two full-length novel and published a volume of poetry That is impressive, publishing poetry and finish two novels. ...

Hello MapleCFreter! Welcome to YWS! :) It seemed like the previous people before me have explained this site quite a bit and you already said that you are getting the ...

Hello! So, I noticed some grammatical errors you repeated a bit throughout the story. One of them: t's 6:30 am. "Shoot!" Mel exclaimed. You're not starting dialogues in a new ...

Hi! So, with the dialogue, I feel as though they're over exaggerated which made them rather difficult to read. I know you're trying to set the scene and everything, but ...