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Hi! Welcome to YWS! :) I hope you like it here. So, eh... What do you write? Stories? Poems? Or something else? I like to write a little bit of ...

Hi! I think that this is a rather good poem. Although I'm not too sure how some of the stanzas relate to each other. Like the first two. In the ...

Hi! A fairly nice story overall. You had some really nice descriptions going in there, which is good. However, there are some phrases that sounds a bit awkward or is ...

Hi! I really liked the story that was written and how you started with the present time, but then gave us a flashback straight away. I thought that was pretty ...

Hi! So, I'll start with some nitpicks: Like if you and i would sail The line sounds rather incomplete to me. Sail to where? There's also some little mistakes, like ...

Hello! I quite like the simpleness of the plot and the language you used was very flowy and soft. So, that's all good. However, the beginning came across as a ...

Hi! With the structuring, I would recommend you to divide them up into stanzas, since they could be divided really easily. Like this: Blue skies Sunny skies That's what I ...

Part 3. All thoughts and comments are welcome. Even if you haven't read the first two parts. :) “You had me worried there for a while, little sister.” “I-I'm sorry. ...

Hi! I quite like this poem. It's also interesting how you made the narrator a guy. Since typically, when I read these type of stories, the misfortunate one seemed to ...

Hi! Okay, this story was a bit flat for me. You have chosen a topic that could be written with an emotional punch, yet, I don't think that you achieved ...

Hi! Alright, there's a few things I want to say: - First off, show don't tell . In the first paragraph, you told us about how Feerah had been dumped ...

Hello DreamingForever! First thing's first: Welcome to YWS. I hope you like it here. I know I do. I play the violin, viola and piano and soon I am going ...

Hi there! I have to agree with glitterbox, the idea behind the whole story is really sweet and wonderful. The idea might be one that's used a lot, but, for ...

Hi! I think that this piece is a bit... stoic at the moment. In the first stanza, especially. You were really good at describing the actions and rocks tumbling to ...

Hiya! This is a pretty interesting poem. I really like the beginning and how you contradict what reality really is, that part made me think a bit. What is reality? ...