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Actually the wording isn't that awkward. Except for the first stanza, the wording it a tiny bit awkward it kind of corrupts the flow. Also you used the word pain ...

Beautiful poem. Short, simple and sweet. Although I do think that the second part of the poem about God seems a little bit jolting. One moment it's about 'you' who ...

Hi greg925, I found your structuring a tad strange here: Is this the consequence of a second rate friendship? By some happy coincidence, we were linked together. I don't understand ...

Nice poem, short and sweet. Love the title as well. Although, may I suggest breaking it into stanzas? Like this: My hand reflects my work Callused fingertips Ink-stains rampant. My ...

Hi, Okay, you have a nice poem there, breaking through the ordinary, boring walls of describing the ocean (blue, calming, etc.) with jumping adjectives and similes. However, I spotted a ...

Very nice, very unique. I'll admit, I'll never have thought of doing a poem from an emotion's point of view before. Brilliant. Although, I will admit it seemed a tiny ...

Hi sarahjane97, The poem you have is very sombre, you potrayed that brilliantly. You have very nice imagery. Especially here: from a tight line of war to an open crescent. ...

Alright, since the others have mentioned the lack of structuring, I won't go into it too much. It does look a bit full and hard to read though. The poem ...

EDIT: Really sorry :(. I see the metaphor now.

Hi cupcake. You have a (literally and metaphorically) sweet poem. It's like a rainbow, with all the flavours you threw out there. Your poem flowed naturally. Your structuring and grammatically ...

Hello Shyblueishflower, Like the previous reviews have mentioned. Breaking it up into stanzas would be great: it makes it easier to read. Now that's out of the way, I can ...

You have a very sweet and cute poem there. Although I think that you could clear the structuring up a bit. Make it into stanzas so that they rhyming pattern ...

You have a really nice topic there. And you executed it quite well. It was plain, yes, but I like things plain: it's easy for people (ie. me) to understand. ...

To be honest here, some of the lines seemed forced. I don't think that you should ever put rhyming first in poetry, because if that's the main point of the ...

So... Your poem has a very nice flow, it's got the correct grammar, nice structure and even a bit of rhyming. I say you did well the rhyming, the lines ...