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Hi! Since you have several poems here, I'll go over them one by one. Firrst one, No Stranger To My Heart. With this poem, I think that you did a ...

Hi there! So, this is the beginning right? Well, for a beginning I think that this chapter might introduce a tad too much characters and back story. When I read ...

Hiya! With the poem, I think that it communicates your idea across very clearly: that the narrator would be pretty much dyfunctional without their mind. But what I'd like to ...

Hi! If I may say so, I think that this poem is written rather brilliantly. The poem had an unreliable narrator, which can be confusing and strange if it's not ...

Hey there! I noticed some grammatical errors there, ahmedBurroj has pointed out the spelling errors. So, I'll go on about the ellipses, generally ellipses have three full stops and having ...

Hey there! I have to repeat what xXTheBlackSheepXx said about the nose. I think that the nose is a bit big and defined, not that there's anything wrong with that, ...

Hello! Well, before we get onto reviewing the story, can I please suggest that you type the title properly. Typing it like that is not only strange, you wouldn't find ...

Hello! So, I really like the idea behind this poem: that insanity is alright, heck, it's better than alright. I'm sure that some of us could relate to that one ...

' My blue eyed boy.' Every time I walk past you in the hallway, That's what I think. I know this isn't so. But really, I could not care less. ...

Hello I have to agree with Faery007 there, this poem is kind of lacking in emotions, you told us this happened and this happened and so on. I'd like to ...

Hi there! Okay, so, I'm not too sure what you're trying to achieve with this poem. My guess is that the poem is saying, 'I like the way I am, ...

Hai! With the poem, what you've written so far is great. The description of the setting you've given us is written brilliantly. You've even put rhyme in there, which I ...

Hello! This poem is really, really sweet. Not only that, you've written it in a very simplistic way as well, everything you have to say is written in the most ...

Hello! I think that you have a pretty good idea with where this poem is going. But some of the lines sounds a bit... off, I suppose. Some of the ...

Hi! Nitpicks: So, this prologue has a huge paragraph. Massive. It'd be much, much easier to read if you space it our more. A bit like this: It was a ...