Mentalist

Thank you, for the comments.

You ripped apart my chest and touched my still beating heart (injecting it with morphine to keep me addicted) Jabbing your hand into my intestines, you only found the dinner ...

Don't be afraid to write, take in the critiques, learn. Most critiques are filled the critics opinion, but it still has value. Love is horrible,powerful and unstoppable. It rips at ...

I really like this poem, Flem. How, towards the end, it started getting jumbled and crazier, mimicking an addiction and how someone needs it. At first I was confused in ...

Thank you, for the critique. I put that in parenthesis for to connect that she's now dead in present time. I've also changed the last stanza up a bit, so ...

I rather like this one, I'm not sure why. Go ahead and eat it alive. -- She used to be able to hold your hand with feathered fingers. I would ...

You're art is very Alex Pardee-esque. I like it. I really like the one that you called "water" I dunno why, it just look very cool.

I wrote this after last night, being bored in the local Night Club. The point is very subtle so if ya don't get it, doesn't matter. But I like it, ...

I separated the word "puppet" to keep the rhythm of the poem, like I did with "violence". Thank you for the critiques, I do realize I have a problem with ...

Time for an exciting critique from, moi. The starved body begs that she wouldn't Shove the finger down her throat She's empty Hm, maybe think of a metaphor for a ...

Okie dokie, here's another exciting poem I've written. -- I listen to-- for-- the beat a mantra: onetwothreefour. It whispers such things of vio lance, of a Pup pet Master ...

This is the first poem I've ever written, thought I'd post it to see what I need to work on in future works. He could sing a song-- without a ...

Hey i originally wrote this as a song but i can't seem to make a melody that fits so i'm wondering what you think of it as a poem. Should ...

Very helpful reviews, I'll be sure to make the changes and clear up things in my next draft. Whenever I get around to writing it.

Mages Book 1: The Storm By: Mage Banks Hi, I am really in need of YWS! I’m writing this awesome story and I don’t think I started it off right. ...