Megrim

If you have worldbuilding explanations for these things they should go in the text ;) Outside of a critiquing site, you don't generally get the chance to explain yourself to ...

I wasn't going to mention the dream, because I have personal peeves with dreams, especially prophetic or visionary dreams. But as it's not something concrete, merely vague whispers and hints ...

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Sometimes you can finagle it so the objective situation is clear to the reader, even while the POVC is making incorrect judgments left and right. Tricky thing to do though, ...

Practice makes perfect! Keep at it.

Oh right, I keep forgetting to check the dates on things. Sorry, haha!

"because when I don't describe more, people tell me off for not describing" Sometimes when people say you should describe more, what they really mean is they didn't have a ...

Can you give me some specific examples?

What corporations?

I almost forgot to reply to this! Thanks for the wonderful review and kind words. You made some excellent points!

Thanks for the review, and I agree with all your points! I thought I explained (well, hinted at) the details about source vs focus and how they know who's who, ...

Thanks for the wonderful review and some good suggestions! Glad you enjoyed it :D Good comments about Koby's emotions Re: Niven. I won't spoil anything ;) Hopefully I'll finish chapter ...

Oh oh I just thought of a good example--the beginning of Up! The love story revolves around their mutual love for adventure and imagination. The reason it's so heartbreaking is ...

Oh oh I just thought of a good example--the beginning of Up! The love story revolves around their mutual love for adventure and imagination. The reason it's so heartbreaking is ...

Oh oh I just thought of a good example--the beginning of Up! The love story revolves around their mutual love for adventure and imagination. The reason it's so heartbreaking is ...