Megrim

I'll break it down by question, starting with the easiest :) 14yo getting a flat - This seems pretty unlikely to me. If you want her to be independent and ...

what animals were around London in the 1800s? Huxleys, hydrogen sniffers, and elephantines? I'll show myself out...

I'm a little confused. It's just, wouldn't it be ok if I keep it seperate from the culture I'm trying to represent I'm not sure I understand what you're going ...

I didn't say you were writing historical fiction?

Forgive me for intruding here, because I know nothing about the specific cultures in question, but I do closely follow discussions of cultural appropriation and how to portray "the other" ...

Something to consider might be how to keep tension and conflict in the scene. Things he's worried about or jealous of or whatever when he sees the others, or maybe ...

Hmm I think I need more info on the context and actual scene and setting. My recommendation is to avoid proper nouns like the plague and stick to only descriptive ...

You love writing. You've been telling stories your whole life. Maybe you should major in something related to literature or creative writing in college? Maybe you want to make a ...

In my reviews, if I'm going to make a wording-level comment, 90% of the time it's about verb choice. Verbs are the secret ingredient, so easily overlooked, that can make ...

Oh, pronouns! I feel you. Nothing like writing a same-sex couple to make you hate pronouns. One of my best writing buddies has a novel that's military sci-fi, and she ...

I think it sounds fun, even IF it's been done before. And there's a key component that will make it special: I notice in your summary you mention nothing about ...

At first I was like, "oh, just another one of THOSE stories," but then you have this fantastic twist. That's the real seller there, and you'll want to play to ...

Well, here are a few options... 1. Have them look in a mirror and observe their reflection. DO NOT DO THIS. This is an aggravating trick used by everyone at ...

Hi Vibe! Sounds like fun. The most interesting thing to me with time travel is when everything ties together, like predestination paradoxes and things like that--especially when you don't see ...

Is it worth continuing? Absolutely. Is it too cliche? Not from what I can tell. Is it 'overdone'? Depends on how you spin it! Is it super interesting and I ...