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Re: you me and everyone else
* = spelling/grammer. Strikeouts = words that are not needed. [suggestions] = in otherwords, What I would do. -blah blah blah- Whats I'm thinking as a reader. I lay in ...
Jan 14, 2009 -
Re: Wounded.
"She was scared, shocked, and in pain." Maybe you should find a way to show us that she was scared, shocked and in pain. For example, If your scared, some ...
Jan 13, 2009 -
Re: Wistful Thinking
I think you should develope this into a story. Very neat Idea. orginal. And well thought through. It makes me ask questions like, Why doesn't this girl know about the ...
Oct 27, 2008