Medusa

This is a good point...Ill have to think about how to change that.

Thanks! I'll elaborate more, and I'll get the next part up soon.

Thanks guys, I'll get to the mistakes. I see I made some typos.

Welcome to my world, my love. The repetition of "my" is kind of awkward. I think deleting the second "my" would help. ‘Tis a scary place. I wouldn’t know. For ...

Thanks a bunch for checking this out! Um, I know that a house may be condemned for safety reasons, but they can be hangout spots for bums and teens. I ...

Fear. It’s a word I will never understand. I sit on the edge of oblivion, my feet swing in tempo with the singing winds, and the little red glow of ...

11:23 PM IN THE LOFT My name is Lauren Fields, and my daughter is a terrorist. It wasn’t hard to figure it out, you know. The first clue was all ...

Im up! I need to catch up on my nano words!

[021. Pandemonium] [Picture # 3] I am the people in their colored suits—going through the motions of a day’s work. The hours are hollow. The noise from the street, the ...

I was called away for 4th of July, and such, but I'm back, and I'll critique both of your things soon.

I'm not going to give a critique on this series--as much as a [OMGZZZZZ]. I absolutely adored this story. No, seriously. There are few literary peices that make me more ...

Sounds great. I'll get right on that. Anyone else? C'mon guys!

May-- like I told someone earlier, this is for a contest, and I underlined the words to show I used them (chosen from a list of words). Otherwise, thanks! --Medusa.

Thank you so much, Kitty. Your crit was extremely helpful. I re-edited my peice, and changed some things, and I'm considering adding plot to make it...make more sense, or something...but ...