McMourning

I agree that your words painted the image perfectly in my mind. However, I do think your poem could use a little work. There's a difference between "pretending i am ...

Hmm....I understand that this came from a prompt, but I feel like the slashes are distracting. A prompt is merely a starting point for a rough draft. Much revision can ...

Bob Giblet Lucy Loose Sweetie Swanson

I like how you start telling the story right away. It especially works well with this format. It's interesting how you chose to tell snippets of different people's lives. However, ...

She didn’t dress like a princess, or talk like a princess, or act like a princess because she was pretending to be a regular girl. Why would she do that ...

Someone trying to complete his bucketlist

I think Rosey Unicorn has a very thorough and correct response. I will add that I do not imagine my work being read by schoolchildren or college students. Most books ...

It is one of the most important things in life; it's the key for survival Ever since the beginning of history, knowledge is created by observing and analyzing. Two small ...

Hmm... It certainly is well-researched and written. I found a few grammars errors, though... Similarly, the cause of madness in hatters, such as in Alice in Wonderland This should be ...

The police would respond, of course. They would question the boys to make sure that the boys weren't involved in part of the foul play. The boys may be questioned ...

Ahh...I always wanted to write about the CIA. Bravo for actually doing it. You pulled it off better than I would have. You grabbed the reader's attention early on. Nice. ...

Interesting. I'm sure it was hard to write in text-speak. I don't think I could do it. Voldy: How woz i? Bella: Gr8! sexier dan eva!so confidt n 4ceful! Um...Maybe ...

Hello, Djinn. You seem to have a good handle on this story. Although it seemed long looking at it, I read it through quickly because it moved along nicely. “I’s ...

Hello, RedRum. I agree that you have a really strong opening there. I think the story overall is an interesting idea. I've heard of spirit walking before, but that was ...

For the last weeks I had been living a dream… my dream that I had never before dared to believe that it would ever come true. It seems like a ...