McMourning

Hi. The biggest problem I see is spelling. "Thier" should be their*, and "Rememberance" should be Remembrance. Where were you when Elvis died trousers and shoes Like Lukas8u, this line ...

Hi. I've only dabbled in writing lyrics, myself, but here's my thoughts... I feel the meaning and the story behind the words. It's beautiful in a sad sort of way. ...

Hi, Lilylynn. I agree with Snoink; you don't need the quotation marks and all the capitals. The order could also be changed a bit... My heart sinks, You never listen ...

Hi. I suppose these are three separate poems in a collection titled "Garage Sale", but this title means nothing to me. It does not unify the poems. didn't know how ...

Hi. I usually don't read long pieces, but you had no reviews! I assume that you have already handed it in to your teacher, but perhaps you will rewrite this ...

Hi. This seems like something I would write, and I hope that you aren't using people's real names. After all, this is fiction. I cry as I sing myself to ...

Hi. I agree that you need some commas, but I also think breaking it into stanzas will help. I also think it will flow better if you change this. You're ...

Hi. I'm not sure if this is the very beginning or not. If it is, I feel something is missing. Where did she the glass tube? Did she find it ...

Hi. Overall, a very charming poem. I'm not sure was tempting you, but I had something in my life that was tempting. I love you do not say what exactly ...

Sometimes I borrow one if I need it

Writer's Digest

You get an empty water bottle. *inserts coin*

Hi. The shards themselves jigsaw together to form a story so perfect, you can wait. Giving in, is no longer possible, believing in impossible is not such a lie. Very ...

A colour used as a girl's name

When a stranger reminds you of a character you've written. When you don't realise what time it is because you're so engrossed in what your writing.