McMourning

Hi. I took a photography camp one summer, and I want to repeat some wisdom. Don't take the picture that everyone takes. For me, that was the front of a ...

6/10. "The sun had slipped out of the grasp of the cloudy skies." Nice. It sets a mood for the scene, but there is no action yet. Katherine pushed the ...

Hi. I'm not in the Honor Society, so I really know what they are looking for, but...I think the paragraphs need to have better transitions. After talking about citizenship, don't ...

Why do you even ask if you already know the answer?

Ha! You didn't say it couldn't be brown. Did she?

Why don't you know already?

Short, sweet, simple. But, I'm a stickler. Beautiful and skyscrapers are spelled wrong. There should also be some punctuation, here: On the farm, the sun sets. In the suburbs, it ...

Hey! I love Tin Man . I know people who think it's awful, though, so I tried to see both perspectives while reading this. I think it's great that you ...

Hi. I liked how each stanza was a different feeling. And, I see why that may fit with the title, but I don't like that it is also the name ...

Hi. I am surprised. At first, I didn't know what to expect; it seemed slapped together. Then, I got into it, and it was good, thought provoking. Gryphon made a ...

Wow. I can picture reading this in a short story collection or in a literary magazine. Very good. She glanced around, then grabbed the bust of Marie Antoinette, flipped off ...

Hi, Cassie. I like the idea behind your poetry. Most people don't write about that side of love. But after years of loving, that single person will rip out your ...

Hi. I really liked the poem. You have a steady rhythm to your poetry, but you should add either commas or periods at the end of each line. Inside my ...

Hi. Personally, I love it. My only problem is this phrase Just blowing bubbles The bubble wand was pink, And shaped like a star, It doesn't transition right. Maybe more ...

Hi. I agree with what bludragon525 said--some parts didn't make sense and you definitely need punctuation. Not only punctuation, but spaces between each stanza. I think stanzas should be four ...