McMourning

Hi. I think the title is too generic. Anyone could write about what Christmas means to himself, but it isn't necessarily going to be religious. As for the poem itself, ...

Hi. I liked the beginning more than the end, because the end was different from the rest. One the first read through, I thought this line sounded like an ending. ...

Hi. I think it's interesting that someone might run away from home on a highway, but you speak of running away from the highway of life. I don't know if ...

I don't really think it matters why the bleachers collapsed. What matters is that you were so close to her when it happened, but you couldn't help. As sad as ...

I have to agree with Conrad. The ending was the only part I didn't like. Well, I don't like the salt water lips, either. You could remove both parts and ...

Hi. A sunlight basement sapped of all the warmth the sun brings. I believe it should be A sunlit basement zapped all of the warmth the sun brings. It's very ...

Wow. I like that it starts out sad, but turns to peaceful. That's not something I've seen very often. I remember a time long ago when you had hurt me ...

all this for wondering whether you kiss the way sugar melts I think this is what the whole poem is about. You went to all that work making dessert, wondering ...

Hi. And though I can name it in plain words, I cannot explain it. Love this line, because it's true. I think that everything here is well written. The only ...

Hi. Channon- Im sorry... *** *** for making you mad, for changing my mind, for being all talk, for making you think twice I like your comments about Luca's texts. ...

Hi. I think it reads better column by column. (I certainly wouldn't call that top to bottom. Then we'd read it, I an with... :) ) When read left to ...

Hi. I agree with silented1. There are some things that aren't explained. For the most part, however, I think you wrote well. You have a nice flow.

Hi. I'm a bad girl. I didn't read your intro first. It doesn't need the intro, and I assume you wouldn't publish an intro to it. Point being, that I ...

Hi. I love science fiction; I always have. And, I find your story interesting. It has a good start. It starts differently than a lot of other sci-fi. You switch ...

Hi. My first impression was, "Wow." The fence draws me in, but it is probably been shot by other people as well. I do like that the metal is rusting ...