Mattie

You did get a little repetitive with the "I" I did like it though especially since it revealed so much and you didn't take forever to let the reader know ...

When he said that she would be the last person he would ever love he meant it. When he promised that he would come back and not leave her waiting ...

I enjoyed this from the very start and now you're really doing well. I like the characters and what is happening to them. I hope to read more and I'm ...

I agree with the kissing part. It's either going to be the first time you mentioned it or the last. You have to take one out. I personally think you ...

Was she holding onto the towel that whole entire time? :)

It didn't happen to anyone, but I made it seem as it did, didn't I? :) I just thought that way of writing would be something new for me and ...

Remember me? The girl you dropped off a mile away from her home because you go angry? The girl you embarrassed in front of everyone at school when I didn’t ...

Chanson...where should I begin? Was it your way of writing? Your style? Your truthfulness by making the story about your life? All these things made your story great, drawing me ...

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I think you did good with the imagery too as well as everything else. Rather long, but I enjoyed reading it. The shadows is a great thing to write about ...

I'm not what it protrays in the story as. Just something I decided to write after watching the O.C. All the Same I sit in the dark, Alone, Until I ...

I thought this was great like always. :) I just can't seem to get the idea out of my head that what you write sounds just like something I would ...

I too, liked how you wrote it. The only thing is, what is the guy thinking? What's going on in his mind? I'd have to say this is my favorite ...

For one, it sounds just like the Notebook. Two, I thought it was great. Three, I liked the way you wrote it. Four, you did great with describing their life ...

Hey Kayla. I really liked this. I only found: It was dark when we went through the doors that he had threatened to kill me days before. Shouldn't that be ...