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Chapter 5: Q & A Renee walked along the line of lockers in the school courtyard. She had wondered where Shannon was until she saw her by her own locker ...

Well, for starters this sounds just like King Kong. You also said he died two times, that could have been some kind of hidden meaning. If so, you need to ...

Well, I didn't really like the introduction. It felt more like you were writing an essay than prologue. As I got into the rest, I found most of it enjoyable. ...

Dusky, you write so beautifully! I love your way of complex, but easy to follow. The only problem I had was that it did have some sort of unsatisfaction. Don't ...

Chapter 4: Processing Shannon could feel her face burning, her hands clammy, and heart racing as she waited for Renee’s reaction. It was killing her. She swept her hair up ...

Chapter 3: Telling All Shannon sat across from Renee at the table. Mrs. Wilks was at the end. “So, where did you move from?” Mrs. Wilks asked as she pushed ...

Chapter 2: Only the Surface When Shannon looked at her, she knows what weakness is. The weakness a person can bring you, the slow movement, words unspokened, needs left in ...

This is rated PG-13 for the story content and topic. (It is then rated R when the story comes to chapter 10. You've been warned.) I'm open for critique. There ...

I do think that it's rather unfair that just because some of us have been here longer, we have a buttload more points than newbies. Really, only the new members ...

7/10 because I love peppermints.

Why is everyone putting what they have to say in quotation marks?

But I didn't want it to turn into an argument!

Well, seeing as some adults still collect toys, I would have to say never. I do enjoy a round of tag myself in fact. Any other takers? Anyways, I don't ...

"Part of the reason the society is falling to pieces is a thread like this." On my behalf, I didn't want this topic turned into a random thread about gnomes, ...

From the gnomes?! Oh, I wouldn't know too much about that. Funny guy you are, Qi. But seriously, I wouldn't know what you're talking about. I might have an idea ...