Mattie

Well, Dusky! This was surprisingly good. Not that your others works aren't, but I really enjoyed this. It flowed together smoothly, and by switching point of views it didn't clog ...

Chapter 14: Quitting Time Renee walked home gradually after school that day. She took her time not really caring about when she would get home or how long it would ...

I usually don't like to use outlines when I know where my story is going. If I can keep up with it in my head, I let it stay that ...

Chapter 13: Non-Stop Shannon’s hands shook. This was not excitement. This was all fear. She stood behind a pillar in the courtyard watching Renee. She wished she could run home. ...

Chapter 12: Playful Tactics I had impure thoughts about a girl I know… Renee took her seat in class the next morning. After her confession, she had made no move ...

Chapter 11: On the Edge “It’s been two weeks since my last confession,” Renee said slowly, drawing out every single word. The dryness in her throat closed around them so ...

Chapter 10: Party Hardy "Tear You Apart" by She Wants Revenge. Got a big plan, this mindset maybe its right At the right place and right time, maybe tonight And ...

Chapter 9: Finding Out Renee walked into her house that night baffled. Shannon had driven her home in silence. She was about to go up to her room to think ...

Chapter 8: Falling Renee watched as Shannon read over the contents in the index of a basic Geometry book. "Learning anything yet, Shannon?" Renee asked. Shannon had been sitting like ...

Yes, it does. Thank you so very much. Maybe I'm just paranoid...when I went back and reread over what I wrote, it didn't seem like there was that much.

I always find myself drawing out the conversations that my characters have. I don't really think it takes away from the story, but I find that some of it might ...

Chapter 7: Rethinking After slipping by her mother once they arrived home, Renee rushed up to her room. She wanted to call Shannon to see how she was even if ...

Chapter 6: Forgiveness Renee hated that she would be attending the eight o'clock mass that night. She much rather be at home in her room; the thought of having to ...

Wow, thanks for the information, guys! I'm sure this will help others struggling with the same thing. I now understand the difference and can come back to it when I ...

I really need help with tenses. I know what they are, I just don't know if I used the right one in the story I'm now writing. It's in Romantic ...