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Re: Upon the Mercurian Shore
This was quite nice. It was a cute, tidy little narrative and I enjoyed reading it. Sorry I don't have something more constructive to say!
Jun 18, 2011 -
Re: the answer
Hmm. I got that this was supposed to be sad, but really, I honestly didn't FEEL sad. Why? Lacking in emotion! Try to add some emotion, and a bit more ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Let Them In
Your flow and rhyme seem to be good, doesn't seem unnatural anywhere. I have NO IDEA what this poem is supposed to mean, AT ALL, so I really can't help ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: This Old Closet
This is a beautiful narrative! It gave me a quiet, thoughtful feeling while reading it. The things that reside in the closet have long lost their original scents. Perhaps ‘twas ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Pain beneath perfection
Even though this was cliche as others have pointed out, I still enjoyed reading it, and think you did a nice job. I agree that you should take out the ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Good
Creative piece. I didn't particularly enjoy too much myself, (personal taste) but it definitely was interesting. In the third line you say 'mostly that true? Is the larger part of ...
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: The robin
Nice! I like this topic a lot, and the imagery was good. The rhyme seemed to flow, and wasn't unnatural, so good job there. There were a few lines that ...
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: Lady Justice
Not sure why this is called "Lady Justice" since it seems to me more about personal doubt and confusion. Anyway. It was an interesting poem. The first stanza starts out ...
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: The Writer's Lament
Nice! This was quite amusing. Definitely an enjoyable read! :) Made me smile.
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: I was there
This is good, very emotional, and a great ending. It has a good rhythm, and seems to flow well.
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: An Old House.
Well, I'm not sure what this poem is supposed to mean, and still am not getting any clues after re-reading it, may just be me, but I really don't get ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: my poem
Hmm, interesting way of presenting your thoughts/views. I think you should tidy up the technical side of things, right off the bat. The black sheep is leaving , it was ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: Why Friend Fell
Wow, this was soaked with emotion! I really, really could feel the emotion, and I would have thought 'friend' actually existed if I hadn't read the spoiler. This was something ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: pennyflipper
This is cute, and I like that you made a poem about something silly and rather insignificant (someone finding a penny) into something fun and interesting. A little idea to ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: **Haven't really thought of a title**
This is actually really nice. The boy thing at the end left me CON-FUSED, I mean, when did this become a love poem?! You're talking about life, and how everyone ...
Jun 10, 2011
