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Matthews

  • Other Poetry Re: Upon the Mercurian Shore

    This was quite nice. It was a cute, tidy little narrative and I enjoyed reading it. Sorry I don't have something more constructive to say!

    Jun 18, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: the answer

    Hmm. I got that this was supposed to be sad, but really, I honestly didn't FEEL sad. Why? Lacking in emotion! Try to add some emotion, and a bit more ...

    Jun 16, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Let Them In

    Your flow and rhyme seem to be good, doesn't seem unnatural anywhere. I have NO IDEA what this poem is supposed to mean, AT ALL, so I really can't help ...

    Jun 16, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: This Old Closet

    This is a beautiful narrative! It gave me a quiet, thoughtful feeling while reading it. The things that reside in the closet have long lost their original scents. Perhaps ‘twas ...

    Jun 16, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Pain beneath perfection

    Even though this was cliche as others have pointed out, I still enjoyed reading it, and think you did a nice job. I agree that you should take out the ...

    Jun 16, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Good

    Creative piece. I didn't particularly enjoy too much myself, (personal taste) but it definitely was interesting. In the third line you say 'mostly that true? Is the larger part of ...

    Jun 15, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: The robin

    Nice! I like this topic a lot, and the imagery was good. The rhyme seemed to flow, and wasn't unnatural, so good job there. There were a few lines that ...

    Jun 15, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Lady Justice

    Not sure why this is called "Lady Justice" since it seems to me more about personal doubt and confusion. Anyway. It was an interesting poem. The first stanza starts out ...

    Jun 13, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: The Writer's Lament

    Nice! This was quite amusing. Definitely an enjoyable read! :) Made me smile.

    Jun 13, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: I was there

    This is good, very emotional, and a great ending. It has a good rhythm, and seems to flow well.

    Jun 11, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: An Old House.

    Well, I'm not sure what this poem is supposed to mean, and still am not getting any clues after re-reading it, may just be me, but I really don't get ...

    Jun 11, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: my poem

    Hmm, interesting way of presenting your thoughts/views. I think you should tidy up the technical side of things, right off the bat. The black sheep is leaving , it was ...

    Jun 11, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Why Friend Fell

    Wow, this was soaked with emotion! I really, really could feel the emotion, and I would have thought 'friend' actually existed if I hadn't read the spoiler. This was something ...

    Jun 11, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: pennyflipper

    This is cute, and I like that you made a poem about something silly and rather insignificant (someone finding a penny) into something fun and interesting. A little idea to ...

    Jun 11, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: **Haven't really thought of a title**

    This is actually really nice. The boy thing at the end left me CON-FUSED, I mean, when did this become a love poem?! You're talking about life, and how everyone ...

    Jun 10, 2011


If you ever find yourself in the wrong story, leave.
— Mo Willems