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This was awesome! A simple idea no one would seem to think would make a good poem, but in reality it's really powerful and cool. Great job! Creative and original! ...

Broken Vows Young as lambs with frisky spirits, Fresh as lettuce newly picked, Pure as a virgin maiden, clean as dew washed grass. Strong as a solid suit of steel, ...

This was nice. Quite refreshing, as it's a new, original idea. I liked it! Keep it up!

I agree, this was powerful and gripping. The odd, short line breaks threw me off somewhat, making it harder to read...and a little more imagery and description wouldn't be amiss. ...

This was great! I absolutely LOVED your style of writing! You did everything beautifully, introducing everything wonderfully, not confusing, not a info dump. It's great! Def. PM me when the ...

Hmm. About that line break. Well, just reading it, suddenly it was like "pause", then "continue". Maybe it was just my silly old brain, but it didn't flow nicely. A ...

Nice. This was great! I thought it was very well written. Neat job.

This was cool! I liked how it was like life, but at the same time, a car ride. (At least to me it seemed to portray a picture of life.)

I like this! Even though the repetition of "she is" was in almost every line, it didn't bother me or throw me off, as repetition like that usually does. I ...

I agree with the above two. The stanzas by themselves were really good, but together, they didn't really connect or have any theme. They all sounded like nice stanzas from ...

I really liked this! I thought it was well written and had a nice flow. It was very readable, and I wanted to finish reading it from the start, whereas ...

I KNEW IT!!! After I posted this and looked at it and I was like "I bet they're all gonna comment on the uneven rhyming!" LOL :P Anyway, I will ...

This is nice. I think it would be better off as a poem, as it's short and poetic. It would make a beautiful poem with some editing :) Either way, ...

I liked it. The repetitiousness in the entrance of the lines got a bit dull, but still, this was good.

I just wanted to say this was beautiful and I really liked it! Kitty15 pretty much got all the nitpicks Well I’ll confess that sometimes I wonder Take off the ...