Matthews

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"Don't leave me!" ..."I love you."

This made me smile! I loved it :) I agree that "somewhen" should be changed, as that is not actually a word, and kinda confused/bothered me. Also, "our works will ...

I like this! Good job :) I agree that the last line should be changed, or added to. Oh, and I think you should take off the "and" from the ...

Whoa! This is awesome! I LOVE it! You are an excellent writer!

First of all, this should be divided in the decent stanzas. Right now it's confusing and hard to read, try cleaning that up a bit. Red - corrections Green - ...

I love this!! It's absolutely fabulous. I didn't like the stanza about her looking at the phone, as it did not seem to fit with the previous lines, but I ...

It was the ocean It was the sea It was their god, Their hope, Their faith, For all to seek. None could share it, Only one could bear it. For ...

Head in hands, the razor nails dig into my sweltering brow, And the ravenous beast comes alive once again. I feel the urge to smash my surro u ndings into ...

I once was daddy’s little girl, The cute cuddle bug of the family, That occupation was quite enjoyable; But being youngest is both a blessing and a curse. Am I ...

Purple - comments Red - altered Italics - take out Green - things I like “C’mon you guys, who wants to jump?” She asked again, her voice edging toward bitterness. ...

K, I'll review as much as I can right now. Purple - comments Red - changes Italics - take out CHAPTER TWO It hadn’t always been like this. There was ...

This was awesome! :P I love it! The one thing I disliked was the "though" at the end...and if it needs to rhyme with "amigo" then maybe make it "a ...

It's cute, but rather unoriginal. Maybe ad of a few more interesting lines? There were quite a few exclamation marks in places that didn't really need them, and... ‘Cause you’re ...

Jabber: Thanks for the review! I can see what you mean about there being too much dialogue. I thought that was kinda hard too, about them both kinda being the ...