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Re: For Him Should I Let Go?
Cute poem :) I enjoyed this, and I think you did a good job with the short length and it's just really a sensory piece. Great emotion and ends on ...
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: Rose Petal Liquid
Hmm, I hate to feel like the bad guy here, but personally while I read this it felt almost like one big run-on. I couldn't take a breath to stop ...
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: Heartless
Pretty good poem here! I enjoyed reading it, and the story was interesting and something a lot of people can relate to. Not necessarily 'moving schools' but leaving things behind, ...
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: Once, I Was Mother Nature
Interesting poem. I personally don't believe in the concept of 'Mother Nature', but this was still a good poem that I could enjoy. Once, I ruled the oceans, You do ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: String Of Hate And Lies
You kneel on the floor , tear s falling from your eyes. It's 'tears' otherwise it would become 'tear is', just like 'it's' becomes 'it is', and 'tear is' makes ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Destined to be
OK, to me, it seems cute, and I like that it's short and tidy, and all, but what is the BASIS of it? What ARE you if you're not ordinary? ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Sydney
Sydney She is a beautiful sunrise at the start of a great day, This beginning is rather cliche' and put me off the poem somewhat. It didn't bother me too ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Conquered
Wow, very emotional, strong piece! I don't have much to say other then that - it looks good in all areas and is a very deep poem.
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: I cut myself
Hmm, interesting work. Rather bone-chilling, I must confess, so kudos on that! I like the narrator's tone and voice, and overall is, as I said, a thought-provoking piece. I cut ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: The Puppeteer
Awesome job! I really enjoyed this. Sorry I don't have anything productive to comment on!
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: The Moon's Love Poem
Wow, this is a beautiful piece! I love the fantastic imagery, wording, thoughtfulness....it's just perfect!
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: Math...mwahahahah
So I have to take this AWFUL class over summer and it's...yeah, you guessed it! Algebra. My favorite. So anywho, this was inspired as I sat a moment ago rotting ...
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: deleted
This was very emotional and thought-provoking. The really sad thing is, often times it's so true. I didn't notice any errors. I liked how even though this theme has been ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: The Song of The Seven Seas
Whoa, I love this!!! It's beautifully done, and I love the wording and imagery. GREAT job! It really drew me in, and I think it flowed well throughout. I just ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: My Angels
This is really pretty and sweet. It was a nice length, flowed along, and had a beautiful story. I enjoyed reading it, and it kept my attention wonderfully. My only ...
Jun 25, 2011
