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Re: Featured Member: July 2011!
1. Congrats!!! 2. Oh mah gosh it's Dumbledore dancing and Snape smiling!
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Mine.
Hello. I'm popping in for a quick review. I liked this poem, but I agree that it was a bit too long. I loved the beginning. The lines were of ...
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: untitled
Hello. I am Masque, and I shall be reviewing your piece today. -ehem- First I'll go through some grammatical edits. Blood trickled down Ryan ' s face as his head ...
Jun 17, 2011 -
Re: Reducing Response
Hello, I'm Masque and I shall be reviewing your work today. Wow, this was insane. There is so much imagery and figurative language it is bursting. Usually the problem I ...
Jun 17, 2011 -
Re: A forbidden love
Hello, I'm Masque. Firstly, welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy the site. Alright, your writing itself isn't bad. You have a fairly good grasp over use of the English ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Winter's a Blast!
Hello, I am Masque, and I shall be reviewing your story today. Before I really get into it, there's a few things I'd like to point out. Red = Edits ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Rate the Avatar Above You! [4]
8/10 He's making a funny face. ;)
May 28, 2011 -
Re: Bleached
Inside the envelope there is nothing. Rippling words that flowed over paper And dripped, tasty, from red lips have failed me. The paper is stained horribly, white, empty, Bland and ...
May 28, 2011 -
Re: Official YWS Marriages
Oh, so many weddings! Someone has to tell me when they have theirs so I can come.
May 26, 2011 -
Re: Scorching Words
Ahh these are the kind of poems I like. Some people think poems need to be longer, but I'm quite fond of these little single stanza poems. I thought this ...
May 19, 2011 -
Re: The Puppeteer
This is a beautifully written poem. It flowed nicely, and I enjoyed reading it. I don't have a lot of criticism, so here's my commentary. I am Fear. I like ...
May 18, 2011 -
Re: YWS group photo!
Awesome! I'm excited to see how it turns out.
May 17, 2011 -
Re: Glitter
Hello, I am Masque and I shall review your story today. I really liked this story. It was interesting and well written. Here's just some things I'd like to point ...
May 6, 2011 -
Re: Tainted
The words I praise drip, distastefully, from your lips And onto the floor where they run and spread Until they are thin and meaningless rabble. I try to salvage them, ...
May 6, 2011 -
Re: Alright, so I'm ne here....
Hey PheonixRain. Welcome to YWS. I'm Masq. What kind of writing do you like to do? YWS is a great place for getting good critical reviews. We have a point ...
May 3, 2011