Mars

Hey again! I'll get right into this critique. So, I have a problem with your prologue. All it is is the narrator telling the story in a few words, in ...

Hey! This was...interesting! In a good way. Kind of creepy, kind of disturbing, but well-written. I do have a few suggestions. First of all, your description of Lexii is a ...

Hey Cassie! I quite like this - I'm just going to get right into it. I’m dancing over the others I must tread lightly and not disturb Their thoughts their ...

(As others have stated) I really like this. It takes skill to say so much in so little! Despite that, I wouldn't mind it being continued, since you obviously have ...

Hey Kisba! I'm here to review this. You're right, this is very unconventional. Poetry can bend the rules, though, right? To be honest, though, there is a point where poetry ...

Hey des! releases a sliver of vitality I think this line is too many syllables - though I do really like it! Perhaps you could find a shorter word than ...

Hey faithlessfate! Cool name. Just to let you know, we have a rule that says you should have two reviews before posting your own work, okay? Anyway. I like this ...

Hey! (that are extremely crappy if you've noticed) I don't think they're extremely crappy. Actually, if I read them, and then read this, it might make me rethink my opinion ...

Hey asxz! This was so not lame - it was cute! And very, very relatable. However...I could tell that you wrote it fast, because there were some typos. It helps ...

Hey Ember! Sorry it took me so long to get to this, but I'm here now - let's get started! Also, I know pretty much nothing about the history of ...

Okay! So! Wow. Yeah. Things happen in this chapter, don't they? :) I actually skipped the second bit of chapter 3 for this. I mean, I read it, but I ...

Hey llobalito08! Okay! So, this is a really interesting poem. There were a couple errors, so I'll point those out first. They we're in a quiet bar, shortly after mid-night. ...

Hey again! So, I don't have much to say that's already been said. Anti-pop did a good job of pointing out the nit-picks, so I won't go into those. So! ...

Eeeeeevvvviiiiiiiiii!!!!!!!!!! I know you don't like scripts, but...it's also kind of a poem? And I'm not expecting a really serious review on this. If you can do it you'll be ...

(There are a couple of typos in this one, eg misplaced apostrophes. Make sure you read it again and watch out for those!) KEITH KEITH KEITH! I love this guy. ...