Mars

*tackles* I’ve spread my wings, I’m ready to fly, Why must you stop me one more time, Eek, this line is too long, methinks. It jars the whole flow or ...

I adore you~ they'll pull in the slightest I don't like this. It's because of the they'll - it doesn't really fit, and I also think that present tense (eg ...

Hello, hello! First off - dialogue grammar! Yours is wrong. :-O Don't worry, it's a very common mistake. Basically, instead of "Hello." She said. which is what you have now, ...

Talking of Michelangelo word 22; down The hall was decorated like a successful upscale whorehouse. Its ivory walls were spotted with banal paintings of faces and wildflowers, velvet streamers hung ...

Revealing the truth: The Tell-tale Heart. Trust me.

Lovely! ^^ I'm sure that I'll be referencing YWSers to this article. Also, I've always been horrid at spelling beginning, so congratulations on that. You should def. submit this to ...

black cave to retrieve the treasure within . Many before him had tried, but farther in , the sweet smell of succulent fruit drew him closer. Farther in to the ...

Guyyyyyyssss. I'm bored. Gimme something. :)

Oh gosh. This was...brilliant. I cringed when I saw that it was a parody of one of my favorite poems, but you definitely kept the form and the tone of ...

"Pure awesomeness, that is." Yay Evi!

Hello, Stoney! Welcome to the site. Let's start this review, shall we? First, make sure all your I's are capitalized, dear! A small mistake but it does make a difference. ...

Hey! If you could get around to critiquing my short story I'd very much appreciate it. Thanks!

Tick Tick Tick. The clock rang as the time passed. I looked up and sighed. It was three o’clock , which meant I had another fifteen minutes to dread before ...

Hi Velvet, welcome to the site! You should know that we have a rule here, which is to have two reviews done for every piece you post. This just spreads ...

Why do we need answers anyway?