Manny

I really liked this. Especially the beginning, with the dreams. One thing I'd add though is if you could think up another one that would be nice. Three just seems ...

:oops: I love both of you so much! Those review were awesome and helpful. I really need to watch my word repetition, not just with I, but other things too. ...

I unwrap the leather bundle and carefully grip the machete's handle. With the other I grab the ropes, which are neatly coiled. It's dark and hard to see on the ...

Umm...okay.

How can they be dead or shredded to bits? If you're in tiny pieces, I'd think you'd be dead already. Aside from that it seems pretty interesting. Have you started ...

It's a very touching piece, arch angel. The only thing I'd suggest is: I am and always will be with you It might flow better if you replace am with ...

This is one of those songs that when you read it you can actually hear the song playing in your head. I really liked the time progression, like Pawprint said. ...

0_0 That was an awesome critique, Penguin! Thanks so much! I've taken your advice and tweaked some of the problems. *works on chapter two*

I've changed it slightly, taking some stuff out and adding more. I also reveal a little bit about the other main character, who is still to come. Enjoy and thanks ...

I revised Fight or Flight with some more character emotion and thought. Do you like it more?

He's up 300ft in the air. The mile is how far he went geologically, like a car.

Adam sat in the back of English class listening to Mr. Reynolds go on and on about the wonders of reading. His arms were crossed over the desk, his head ...

I really liked this a lot. If I didn't know Payton was a werewolf before I read it then I would now. Good job, keep it up.

After I'm finished cutting down a tree, I'm going to post the alternate version of this prologue that I talked about earlier. It's from the father's point of view and ...

I've written another version of this prologue from the dad's point of view that is a lot better. I'll exchange them or something today. I've also got Chapter One, Chapter ...