Mandorelute

Hello, nice screen name by the way. This is very raw, I agree, and needs some work. For the first half of the poem I found that I couldn't relate ...

Howdy, I don't have too much to say. I think you had an interesting idea behind this, but I don't believe it was written very well. Your poem is hard ...

This is not written in my normal style, but is a collaborative effort of a friend and myself. Inspired by our own experience in the darkness* , with the hope ...

Hullo, I think this piece has a lot of potential. There is certainly feeling within the words, but it came across to me muted, as if by too many words. ...

Oh good lord, I completely forgot about this thread already; and you're right, Rosey, it escaped my mind because I'm been lost reading everyone's work. Sorry for the delay. Shina: ...

---- JuDe ---- [s]```~*~```[/s] In his small and unfurnished basement apartment, Jude sat at a desk, writing furiously. He kept the place impeccably clean. It wasn't that he was a ...

Hiya, I agree with you. It's a dandy idea but it doesn't carry enough weight within its current length. Have you seen the movie 'Juno'? I cut out the repeated ...

I disagree with dogs, I think this poem is complete and flows very well. Just so you know, I read it aloud to Aubrey and he agreed. But I did ...

This is written in my own open verse form. Please, read it aloud slowly and fall into the rhythm. I'm not concerned about punctuation, this piece is a mass of ...

"Still we attempt to avoid Wading through memoirs, Unable to accept this metamorphosis. Pray for a white-knuckled release and the chance to resurface." This is an awesome way to end ...

Thank you for the reservation, Nuuk. I will post the female character after three this afternoon, and possibly add quite a bit more to Jude's Bio. Character Number Two: JUDE ...

Hullo, First and clearly, I like this. It brings me back to a raw place I remember, wish hadn't happened, and gladly will never forget; the timidly admitted and tremulous ...

Greetings, I like this. But before I go on, I disagree with everybody on the sits/sat thing. Most grammar and spelling, which are truly a boon, have been taught as ...

Hey there. This poem makes me think of someone who is lonely yet content to day dream, satisfied with the adventures one can have within their own mind. The poem ...

May I have characters three and sixteen? If I have to choose, I'd far prefer character three. The main reason that I would prefer two characters is because that creates ...