Mandorelute

Hello there, Kylan. The name of your piece caught my eye, It had the odor of history about it; it'd be right next to Johansson, Jonasdotter...For me, it was perfect. ...

Hullo, I'm glad I came across this. Should it not be: " There are great bunches of grapes, like purple blossoms, being fed to a man of some importance" I ...

Hey there! Good first try. Everyone has to start by making a step. This actually looks similar to my own original writing. Very strait forward, but it's too simple. Why ...

Hey, it took a while, but I'm keeping the promise. Second Stanza, Third Line: "warmed by the fog, almost escaping the death" I think this should be: "warmed by the ...

Hey there, I thought the first stanza was the most powerful. It really expressed the loss of innocence to me. I think for clarifications sake, there needs to be a ...

I hate this piece as much as it is well written. It's written too well, and it's violent. The two contrasting images,both a picture of two bodies set to intercourse. ...

{OOC: Where is everybody?}

In your mountain, within the stone and noble ridges of bone; within the Judas of your sleep; within the jewels and jackals of your mind; O, in your country: your ...

Hello, I have to say this piece pleased me deep inside and I'm quite glad you wrote it. I believe it's better than you can realize, yourself being the writer. ...

Hi there: Stanza Two, Line Three: "He hugs me & kisses me and tells me he loves me" Why do you use the & sign? It does not fit in ...

Hello, Very powerful ending: "We shall go on as always, You and your love, And me and my shame. " The first stanza is unclear. I believe I understood it ...

{ OOC: Did you talk to babanuuk, kitty? Either way, thanks. } ---- JuDe ---- [s]```~*~```[/s] Jude ordered a small plate of palate cleansing Bitter-Sugar candies from the busy waitress, ...

Again, an edition, with Suzanne's awesome aid: The sky is an eyelid, weeping of Furies and Sorrows; but eyes are more honest than this: lies cannot sincerely smile, lies cannot ...

Hello, There are some very creative images tucked in the folds of this poem, such as: "...Four years later, I realized I was lonely. Baby sitters and boardgames were fun, ...

{OOC: ATTENTION KITTY AND SISTANUUK - I'm joining you lovlies this post, give me a que how you want this to go.} ---- JuDe ---- [s]```~*~```[/s] Jude shook his head. ...