MamaLama95

This poem feels a little misguided to me - you don't have a clear sense of who it is you're aiming at, or who you're talking to. And if you ...

I agree with Veritas, it feels underdeveloped - perhaps not like a naked cupcake because God knows those are still RAVISHING, but I still think you could do with a ...

First of all, brilliant. Absolutely brilliant, this is my favourite poem today so far, and I've read about ten, so really well done. Your work was powerful, emotional, refreshing, and ...

This made me laugh so much - not because it's idiotic or laughable, don't worry - because I felt so much in common with this poem. Except with me it's ...

You know, even though your meter was a bit off and the rhyming felt forced at times, I really enjoyed this. You took on a completely different style and you ...

Yeah all of it was great, but we drove each other wild. We didn't see eye to eye, all our complaints were filed. I didn't like this stanza - it ...

I had just one or two nitpicks; He growls her - Do you mean growls 'at' her? And another thing which bugs me is your lack of punctuation. It's quite ...

In general, your piece was really nice - I've personally never been one for haikus, but it's honestly quite good in fact, even though I think it got a little ...

A nice enough piece of work, but there's that something missing for me. It just feels understated, ordinary almost - you use poetic techniques perfectly well and you've got a ...

Amazing photograph. I think you should have used a different font for the writing, something more round, like Jules off picnik. But apart from that, lovely photograph and you really ...

This creates a lot of beautiful imagery and I really applaud you for making it so even and magical. There was one stanza I didn't like; And all of the ...

I'm personally guilty of this myself, so perhaps I'm being mildly hypocritical with this post; however, it really gets on my nerves when I see someone doing a lot of ...

I thought this was brilliant. Like your other works, it flows perfectly, and there is next to nothing I have to criticize about the grammar, or the meter - I ...

Too short, and painfully concise - it was a nice idea, but you didn't make it work perfectly well. I could suggest you do something about the one-liners, but to ...

This was such a wonderful poem - I can relate to it because I also have insomnia, and I feel like walking around my house and outside every night as ...